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  • August 14, 2017 at 7:41 am #163858
    Anonymous
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    Dear Myles:

    Thank you for sharing your poem!

    I like many of the rhymes, they are pleasing to me mental ear, especially these: “I wish (I wish) I wasn’t always trying to be right/ …to pick a fight” and “So how did I manage/ To cause you so much damage”

    In your poem, you asked:  “What did I do that made you walk away?/ There must be a reason/
    That you decided on leavin”- you answered that question at least in part earlier in the poem: you were  “always trying to be right… always trying to pick a fight….(and said) so many thing I wish I didn’t say”.

    I like it. Hope you write and share more.

    anita

    August 14, 2017 at 7:58 am #163862
    Myles
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    Yeah, I kind of noticed that halfway through writing it, I was listening to a beat while writing it and I guess I got carried away a little. But thank ou Anita.

    August 15, 2017 at 5:56 am #164000
    eight
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    Hi there

    I love it. It’s beautiful !!! Keep writing  your songs You’ve got it right!

    Nothing better than real feelings put into words in a song. I wish I could hear the melody also.

     

    Best regards. Gr8

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